Chosen's songs

i hope ya'll enjoy the songs. they....they represent a big part of my life.

i hope ya'll like it. it took me a day to write it.

Thats cute i like it.

yeah well, all my songs come from close to my heart. i write them from experince. sorta easy sorta not. its difficult to write it when all your emotions are going crazy. from heartbreak. super hard.

i hope ya'll like it. its one of my first songs. i wrote the gist of it when i was 8.

well ok i guess nobody likes my song so yeah ok

i hope you like these. there only snipetts but they are all i have for right now.

for the last snippet (of a song i suppose), i think it was creative.

Strong imagery, vivid pictures.

Two lines without rhyme, but it's easily overlooked because of the rhymes in other lines.
But my point here, is that it's those two lines which make a difference to the write.

'thinning gates' What a way to put across the idea of 'vanishing into the distance' (if i didn't get you wrong)! Very creative. I haven't seen another on this site (yet) describing distance as 'thinning gates'. Very very (my apologies for a lack of vocabulary here ><) clear picture. Pain resonates through.

I must admit, if given a choice, i'd just pick those two lines in replacement of the whole write. I think those two lines are enough to explain everything else you had intended.

So here, I must also bring up the point that you had a little too many lines. X:
I think a quote with just those two lines would be more than sufficient.

Still, I have to admit that the whole write was beautiful. Just beautiful.

(almost rendered me speachless, those two lines.)

Thumbs up for that!

Keep writing!

Thanks for your review. I guess u r right on most of those points. So thank u

And yes u understood the meaning in between the lines correct

It's great that I did, I look forward to more of your writes.

(although I won't be active until november. I hope you can wait! >< I will come back and flood your thread with reviews )

I really loved that poem. it has sort of stuck at the back of my mind, that image of the gates disappearing. It keeps replaying... like a broken tape ><

thats cool. i didnt know my writings had such an effect on people. im psorry if it gets annoying

no, i mean in a way like songs do you know? like how lyrics get stuck to your mind and you can't help but to sing that same section over and over like a broken recorder ><

ya i no what u mean. all the songs ive ever wrote r constantly swimming in my mind. like they wont get out. lol i guess that's just because im the songwriter. right now i am working on writing a story and i hope that when its done i can publish it but it might take years.