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PostSubject: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 6:23 am

i wrote these after a break up so yeah

all alone i cry
all because one lie
theres nothing left to do
because im all alone without you

beauty as the night
mystical as the dawn
oh how i wish to see it again

the only time
i didnt know would be the last time
you left me here standing
now im sticking the landing
without you im nothing
is that what i am nothing

i know they suck but yeah


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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 9:53 am

no they dont suck there good.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 11:16 am

it isn't too bad. But i'd like to throw at you the idea of using synonyms instead of repeating the word. i like the flow to it. Could be a pretty piece of song if it was a little longer.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 3:15 pm

It's not bad. It's pretty good. It's just kinda sad. Dx
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 5:39 pm

@MoonWalker12 thanks
@*~Dreamer~* okay
@Dan'sPrincess<3 thanks and i wrote it after a break up so yeah its sad
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 5:42 pm

Thats amazing. Sorry about the break up.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 7:49 pm

thanks and it wasnt meant to be so im getting over it.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Dec 27, 2010 10:01 pm

You should right some more
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyTue Dec 28, 2010 12:18 pm

i might if something else comes to mind
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyTue Dec 28, 2010 2:52 pm

that was good. too bad for your inspiration though Sad sry about that. hope you feel better:)
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyTue Dec 28, 2010 6:08 pm

thanks. and its alright im starting to forget about it.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyWed Dec 29, 2010 2:04 pm

Smile that's goo. keep up the good work lol you should post more
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyWed Dec 29, 2010 2:38 pm

i like the first one the best!
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyThu Dec 30, 2010 2:17 am

ditto lol
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyThu Dec 30, 2010 6:12 am

thanks
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyThu Dec 30, 2010 7:54 pm

some more poems

the snow falls
as i stand here listening to the calls
theres no one left to do
but stand here with you


my tears slip down my face
stuck here in my haze
i look around for you
but all thats left is the blue
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyThu Dec 30, 2010 11:35 pm

these are really good
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyFri Dec 31, 2010 1:55 am

thanks
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyFri Dec 31, 2010 1:57 am

Yup =)
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptySun Jan 02, 2011 4:40 pm

those poems are great you should post more you have a hidden talent that is waiting to bloom
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptySun Jan 02, 2011 7:40 pm

thanks but they cant be that good.
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptySun Jan 02, 2011 9:44 pm

Yea they are
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Jan 03, 2011 12:22 pm

nah
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Jan 03, 2011 5:25 pm

yea
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PostSubject: Re: My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P)   My Poetry(since im told its not crappy :P) EmptyMon Jan 03, 2011 5:34 pm

they are good honestly
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