~!the works of Mari!~

Subject: ~!the works of Mari!~ Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:32 pm

yes I said Crappy cause they are lolz:

~Love Sick~

Im love sick
Im so love sick for you
I miss your smile
I miss your laugh
Oh! Im so love sick for you!
I miss you smile
I mis your laugh
and oh how
I miss The feeing of your hands on my skin
Im so love sick, love sick
Why did you Leave me alone
Im so love sick, Love sick

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:40 pm

Hey, that isn't so bad. That is coming from someone who is getting published too, I like it. its almost an Iambic pentameter. A poem or line with a beat. Like Shakespear.

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:44 pm

Thanks Utpoias! Well at least im getting somewhere with these poems lolz

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:46 pm

Yeah, no problem. Call my Topi, everyone does.

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Thu Apr 21, 2011 11:47 pm

Okie Dokie Topi it is

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 1:51 am

Beautiful poem, i like it very much.

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 2:08 am

Thank you

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 2:10 am

Welcome.

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 3:09 pm

I like it, And it isnt crappy, Smile

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 3:10 pm

lols thanks:) , eh its not crappy but its not the best

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 3:19 pm

It's good, lol, When you start writing more, itll get better, Smile

, but i like it,
YOu should check mine out, Very Happy

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 3:24 pm

kk I will do so! Thank you!

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 3:28 pm

You're very welcome! Smile

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Fri Apr 22, 2011 9:27 pm

I'm never coming home
I can't take all the things you told me
it broke my heart
Im never coming home
so don't even worry about me
think of me as a ghost
a long lost girlfriend of your past
the last thig you'll see
is my blood on the ground
i'm never coming home
to see your blue eyes again

{okay this one is bad but you know i sort of like it, its about a girl who fell in love with a shoulder that came back from the war just to tell her he found someone new so she killed her self hence the never coming home lolz}

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Sat Apr 23, 2011 11:38 am

Wow, I really like that one. Thease poems are really deep, they're gettiong published????

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Sun Apr 24, 2011 3:02 pm

lolz thanks, Umm not sure

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Sat Apr 30, 2011 12:13 am

When Topi wrote,

Utopias' Girl wrote:: Hey, that isn't so bad. That is coming from someone who is getting published too, I like it. its almost an Iambic pentameter. A poem or line with a beat. Like Shakespear.

the publish part))lol

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Sun Mar 25, 2012 3:16 am

((No I am not addicted to drugs, no I am not depressed, yes I know it's not the greatest, it just came out of no where hope you like))

~!Just Another Drug Addiction!~

falling down, falling down
No one can help me through this
It's just another drug addiction
I should have known that things would get harder
There is no way I can survive
this is my apocalypse, I cannot survive this
I never said goodbye and now I am on my own
digging my grave deeper..
my life falling into an oblivion

it's just another drug addiction..
the bottles empty, the barrel loaded,
it's just another drug addiction...
my grave is finished, the apocalypse here
it's just another drug addiction...
I'm falling down, I'm falling down

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Sun Mar 25, 2012 2:01 pm

I like them Smile

Subject: Re: ~!the works of Mari!~ Mon Dec 10, 2012 1:41 pm

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