Comments - Will I end it all or will it end me?

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i think that its rely gud so far by maybe u shud try adding some more detail lik why Jannet was walking dwn the road in the first place and maybe making t more descriptive so you really get a feel 4 where they are bt otherwise i think its gud and u shud defo right sum more wil u post sum more soon?

it seems like jannet is talking to a little kid almost maybe you should try and make them sound older and i agree with LittleNightDreamer more detail is in order

sorry i havnt been in this froum for a while

i agree with the comments ^^ but other than that i think its good and has alot of potential to be great.

well i think im going to get rid of it

okay ive totally erased it heres the new

I like it will there be more ???

oh yea there will be more i just havnt been in the forum for awihle

I like it ssooo farrrr. It's great I hope to see more.

haha thanks ill right more soon

K (:

same you do more :d

Loll stupid evil computer keys. Cant wait for more.

READ ME PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

if you want this story to go in a diffent direction or if you have ideas as to what i should put in this story pleas tell me i'd love to hear or if you think i should take something out let me know!!!!!!!

I love it so far. I would like to know more about Sarah and James. Like do they have a story that goes along with sarahs like was he there for her or did they just meet like normal people would.

yea i can try

Thanx, maybe its just me but I really enjot a book when I really know the charcater

looks good so far

i luv it u should write more.

sorry i havnt been on in awhile

luv it keep writeing

Devil Child, you need to continue the story. Please