Namine's Poems

To tell you the truth I seriously don't know if half of this is poetry so tell me if I did this all wrong. I only had one poetry 'lesson' and all I can rember is the hikuia(sp) part. But this is mainly free verus. So here you go. Oh and cconstrutive and I said COUNSTRUCTIVE crtisiasim is excepted because like I said I don't even know if this is poetry.

Exposure

Pull back the petals of a flower,
And you'll see what it's made of.
Pull back my petals and what'll you see?
Broken hearts and crushed dreams.
Lies, truths, and secrets.
Friends and enimies.
Memories good and bad.
Take all of me,
Or push me away.
But that's what you'll see when you open me.

Because of You

I cry myself to sleep at night,
Because of you.
I bleed,
Because of you.
I run away,
Because of you.
I don't try,
Because of you.
See the tears in my eyes,
Guess what.
They are
Because of you.

I am the Poet

I am the word and the rhythm,
I am the Poet.
I am the page and the lyrics,
I am the Poet.
I am the story and the song,
I am the Poet.

Give Me Reason

Give me reason to let this moment go.
Give me one single reason why I should forget this,
Because I don’t,
I love you.
But apparently you don’t love me.
I’ve gone all this way and this is what I get?
Give me a reason to let time past and forget you ever came.
Give me reason for letting this one good memory fade away.
Give me time to prove myself,
Just give me one chance.
Please.

Fate

Fate is a funny thing.
It likes to play tricks on you.
But you only have two options,
Embrace the way Fate makes your life go,
Or just give up on life itself and let Fate push you around.
Don’t let Fate stomp on you crush your dreams and make you cry.
Because there is a third option,
To take control of your life.
Define yourself.

they are AWESOME. i knew you could write really good

These aren't the ones for my class but I decided to give a try before hand. I am doing my class poems on the elments.

well hot damn. these are good =DD i bet the ones for your class will be good as well :]

Thanks.

Let Me Tell You is the sequal I guess you might call it to Give Me Reason

Let Me Tell You

You have proven me wrong.
You have given me reason to give up all hope.
But I ask one thing in return for forgetting you.
Have you forgotten me?
Do you know what pain it causes no matter how clean the brake is?
Let me tell you.
It hurts so bad sometimes I wish I never met you.
It keeps me awake all night wondering what my life will be like now,
Now that you are gone forever.
It hurts so bad I can’t cry.
It hurts to have one thing that centered your earth torn away from you.
That’s how much it hurts.

Cry Yourself to Sleep

Do you cry yourself to sleep at night?
Do you ever wonder if anyone feels your pain?
If anyone even cares?
I cry for what the next day will bring.
I cry because of what it already brought.
I cry because sometimes I feel like it’s the only thing I can do.
Is it?
But that is no longer for me to decide.

i love them :]

Thank you. The next to are probably horrible I cannot rhyme or rap worth anything.

Sprit was away the sin,
I will never do it again.
Air protect me,
Do not flee.
Water wash away the pain,
So I no longer need a cane.
Fire come and burn,
I'll put the ashes in an urn.

Please do not flee,
Come help me.
Bond as one,
Under the sun.
Stay strong all night,
Don't give up the fight,
Please help me.

Tears

Tears are weakness.
Tears are showing everyone you have given up.
You have given into them.
But don’t.
Fight back,
Show them how sad you are.
Don’t give in.
Don’t give up.
Prove who you really are.

actually there preety good :] poems dont have tah rhyme. not all of them

Those were for class.

Roses
See my beuaty
But when you reach out to touch me
To take me,
Ouch.
You just get hurt.
Beauty has a price.
And that price is pain.
Anyone close to me gets hurt.
But still lingers on my beauty.

i love them all. especially the last one.

Thank you.
I know it doesn't rhyme or have any rhythm or anything but I like to write it.
Thanks again.

welcome, and ive read plenty of great poetry that doesnt rhyme.

Hey Namine =]
I ment to comment earlier about how good these are but my internet's rubbish and my connection goes all the time x[

Anywayz..these are awesome xD
Keep writing

Veronica-You are absolutly right.
Rose: Thanks so much and I will.

The poems with lesser repetition is less boring. Due to over repetition in those few poems, it seems to distract you from reading it. Makes me irritated reading it.

Give Me Reason, Let Me Tell You, and Scars are the three that I feel is better among the others so far.

Continue writing!

Thank you for the consturctive critsisum (I was pretty sure no one knew what it ment for awhile) and I'll keep that it mind.

Lol..I know what constructive critisism is...I'm just rubbish at giving it about poetry...It's better getting critisism from another poet since they know what they're talking about...Listen to Ger's advice she's brilliant at what she does =]

I will.
Yeah there were some people that got the critsism part but not the counstructive and basiclly just showed me all the bad things in my writing. (So I'm not talking about you guys)

Urgh..I hate people who only critisise (sp), youu ask for opinions and ways to make it better and end up with comments on what you did wrong...It easy to put complain about something then it is to offer advice...If I think of any ways to improve it I'll tell you...I never critisise unless I have a nice comment to follow

Thank you.

No problemo =]