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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
  
Age : 31
Posts : 2072
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| | Subject: Lexii's Poems Tue Sep 22, 2009 4:57 pm | |
| You've Got Me
You've got me.
Got me wrapped around your finger.
You've got me
Got me speechless hurting me like im worth nothing.
You've got me
Got my heart and your breaking it into pieces.
You've got me
Got me crying at night over you.
You've got me
Writing depressed poems because you hurt me everyday.
ehh, i know its not good.. | |
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*~Dreamer~*
Combining your affinities to save the day
 
Age : 29
Posts : 2240
Location : Place where I can be away from loneliness.
Join date : 2009-07-14
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Wed Sep 23, 2009 4:29 am | |
| It's a good piece of work, but it will be smoother if you do not vary the number of syllabuses so much. Keep it around a few syllabus range otherwise it will be easy to stumble of the lines because it's too irregular. The general flow is good and portrays strong emotions. Keep it up! | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Wed Sep 23, 2009 6:37 am | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Thu Sep 24, 2009 5:25 pm | |
| The once happy thought that was me
is now a eroded dark memory.
Inside I'm black and hallow.
My insides have turned with nothing to fallow.
The days turned to night and night in to day.
The thing i was i can no longer be.
I can feel it in me taking control.
The Demon beneath my skin taking its hold.
I'm the dark and i have embraced it.
Now im it which takes its control over me.
Hiding from day, rising at night.
The pain it feels when it comes in to the light.
Taking control, keeping its hold.
A peace of me, what i am, what i once was.
Empty, broken, emotionless, in vain.
Darkness feels not even the smallest pain.
Take one thing from this poem tonight.
Sometimes things just aren't so bright.
And even threw the brightest light the brightest sun.
There's a little darkness in everyone. | |
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Mari-chan
Trying to stop war
Age : 29
Posts : 8899
Location : Dancing in and out of the beams of a neon moon ♥
Join date : 2009-07-12
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Name: Breeann
Age: 17
Affinities : Poetry & Future Sight ((refers to my story))
| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Thu Sep 24, 2009 6:25 pm | |
| ^Kyaa~ i really like that one!! | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Thu Sep 24, 2009 7:49 pm | |
| thank youu  | |
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Mari-chan
Trying to stop war
Age : 29
Posts : 8899
Location : Dancing in and out of the beams of a neon moon ♥
Join date : 2009-07-12
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Name: Breeann
Age: 17
Affinities : Poetry & Future Sight ((refers to my story))
| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Thu Sep 24, 2009 10:22 pm | |
| anytime! you should write more! | |
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*~Dreamer~*
Combining your affinities to save the day
Age : 29
Posts : 2240
Location : Place where I can be away from loneliness.
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Fri Sep 25, 2009 7:25 am | |
| Good, full of emotions. The idea may not be fresh and unique, but you've portrayed it in a unique way. Good job, keep writing.
))Managed to sneak a few secs to write this. Will be back in a month.(( | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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Posts : 2072
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MoonDreamer
Finally mastering Earth
Age : 40
Posts : 1064
Location : In a small cottage cuddling with Dimitri.
Join date : 2009-07-20
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Name: Luna
Age: 18
Affinities : Air
| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:01 am | |
| I like the last poem, is really moving and dark, just the way I like them. Keep the good job up!!!! | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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Posts : 2072
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Wed Apr 14, 2010 5:35 pm | |
| I stand there just breathing
watching, theres never nothing going on
I listen to the wind flow softly through the trees
breathing in slowly and breathing out in bursts
I close my eyes and feel the earth beneath my feet
the grass between my toes
I rock back on my heels
and forward rising to the balls of my feet.
the wind stops and I drop like a puppet
without strings
my back is cold against the ground
grass tickles my neck
I relax and begin to dream. | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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| | Subject: Crimson Black Sat Apr 17, 2010 3:06 pm | |
| Time passes by as I slowly cry,
Broken by the love you take,
Inside I slowly die
Trying to find my place outside
I lock my heart inside
Nowhere to run nowhere to hide
Im now broken inside
Where has my love gone
Can this be you forgot about me
Never could I bleed so much
Crimson red my heart did bleed
Blackest as night turned it did | |
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Nightchild
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Age : 27
Posts : 16373
Location : Sweetie, I don't think so
Join date : 2010-01-18
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Name: Destiny Jez Fall
Age: 13
Affinities : Can't miss what I aim at, Spirit and Earth..
| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Sat Apr 17, 2010 4:44 pm | |
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lexiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii
Seeing the 'ghosts' of dead students
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Posts : 2072
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| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Sun Apr 18, 2010 2:31 am | |
| Thank yah  | |
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Nightchild
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Age : 27
Posts : 16373
Location : Sweetie, I don't think so
Join date : 2010-01-18
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Name: Destiny Jez Fall
Age: 13
Affinities : Can't miss what I aim at, Spirit and Earth..
| | Subject: Re: Lexii's Poems Tue Apr 20, 2010 2:26 pm | |
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