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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sat Aug 01, 2009 10:13 pm | |
| Unknown Face Standing here and looking out into the darkness. I feel at home here in the shadows. The things that I had fear seemed to disappear the dreams have faded from my head. I drop my weapon. The cold steel makes a clank as it hits the ground. My life seemed too changed right in front of my eyes. I take in the breath and hold on tight my ears started to change they goes into a point and becomes floppy. The cool wind blows in my fur. I change into a beautiful beast I let out a cry that turned into a howl. My long bushy tail wiggled around in circles. My cares of this form comes to me. I shift the ground from under my feet without making a sound. I smile a kennel grin as I take off into the darkness. Free to roam this world and be just me and nothing else. No mask to cover up what I have done or to hind from my past. To looked at my reflection and see ME not this girl that stands in my place around everything
Our home or Not I close my eye and wish will all that I am Take us away from this hell That was once our little piece of haven Take us to somewhere we can be us Were we don't have to worried about stupid people Were our yard is our yard. Let it all burn away from us I dined thee to a life of hell I dined thee to a life of hell who would had done this. Well I am thinking about it. There so much better than what I am been livening. I am I living a life of lies or just a life of Hell??? I didn't know I wish I could tell you all just go fu*k yourselves and move on with my little life But I don't have the voice for it.
War In my heart I hear the sounds of the drums The Drums of war As the night Takes me to a place were the war Has taken over all that I think could be Taking breath as Children cries in the night What would be there In my heart I heard the voices of What I thought could be Holding this prison
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:27 pm | |
| The Shadow I have become Smile as I was part of the Shadows in my room. I was long and forgotten under the sun in the night I was left to live. Marked me and burned me Let it all come down like rain Leave me here by myself What could I do As I was forsaken to this world I didn't know if I could really live like this again Forgotten here in my little world Among the Shadows I could call them too me and leave this place behind me. I curled up to the darkness as the night sings it song Burn me and marked me Leave me and Tease me Love me and fight me GO ahead and forget me I don't care anymore let me live my life as I see it I belong here in the night ! Leave me here were I feel like that I am loved.
Love Love is it you? Or is it me? Or is it this place in my mind the land that cuts us deep in the heart of everything the darkness comes around yet again my tears spilled upon the ground Cold and die... Please say it not our love!
Love it is you? Or is it me? The place that I lay my head at every night the sent is so sweet the wrath seemed to be there but they looked in your eyes seemed to die with each words I speak. Have we let it weather and die? Cut our love and let it bleed!
You and me me or you? Love or pain? Pain and Love Let it all go under as this world cut us and it bleed I don't want this anymore the pain of the world around us that does not want us to love or be happy.
Let this die Let them be right Let them see us walk away from everything Everything that we build Let them see it burn Light it up and watch it all go away with A firefly blames Our bleeding love As to end some way So let us take it like this one Write the hate notes Let the tears run down our face Let them see us pain of all is gone Paint the picture they want to see Ripe out our hearts for them Forget everything we have been through... Let the fight end with our blood on the floor.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:33 pm | |
| Air Cast Brother Air Without you we can't breathe we can't live without you. You bring so much life to us. May you wisher the secret that we want to know you are our brother In the name of Nyx I call Air to my circle May you protect us as big brother would.
Fire Cast Sister Fire Without you we would not know wrath of the night your flame burns within us all. It is want gives us life. May your flame light show us the way to enlighten you are our sister In the name of Nyx I call Fire to my circle May you show us beauty as a sister would.
Water Cast Father Water without you we couldn't be you make up our very body your steam runs though us. May you show us a father's love. You are our Father. In the name of Nyx I call Water to my circle May you guide us through our life as a protection as father would.
Earth Cast. Mother Earth Without you we are nothing. You give us somewhere to live somewhere to call home. May we heal you one day You are our great mother In the name of Nyx I call Earth to my circle. May you guild us like a kind mother
Spirit Cast Great Spirit Without you we would be lifeless. You glowing life lives within each of us. You give us our way of life May you never leave us when we need you most you are our playful spirit In the name of Nyx I call Spirit to my circle May you show us a new way to live.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:36 pm | |
| Why linger here? To linger here and knowing something I can see them hurt and pain I want to help them but I can't the moon light shine down at them. And they are able to make their self happy but yet they sit in the dark I don't know why I am here in the dark of souls around me Magic and power pounding around me Holding my breath as the night turn into the dawn Loving to hear her words of love and hope Knowing it would all fall on false hopes And all would die in the heart and soul Deep breaths and understanding what is going on. I looked around at each of their faces knowing that there is no helping them OH great one what could happen if I would just show myself and show them what could happen to them. To linger here and not knowing home and love ever again, Just people passing by and living a life that I once had. I am just a shadow to them and nothing more No more can be really there. I am just a fly on the wall . No voice of my own No life at all Just a shadow Unsure if they knew that I once lived there where they call home I just linger here and let things go on Why do I linger here knowing there could be something better out there for me?
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:39 pm | |
| Raven's calls Breath with every step you take to face the unknown as the Raven Calls Power untold will show itself in a form shown to our kind!
Shadow Raven lacking around weary minds watches with no age New Protections will be cast Ones that hate each other will join forces!
Raven calls to it father Whose lays beneath the Earth Lost and forgotten but soon will rise To struck fear in women alike
The Queen do dance to see her beloved king 'Rise old Great One!' she do calls out As the Ravens take their form The Earth do cries as the wicked kind rise
Oh, how we weep as the Earth dies Taken from us once Why yet another time Arrow straight and true
Oh the Raven Calls The earth do bleed The wicked one rise Is all hope lose with the earth?
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:44 pm | |
| One Year going under One year Nothing different than before Lost and confused under pressure No Job Life is going down a path Unsure and losing the battle One year Nothing just like before No pretty things to show off to people Just my old shoes Wallet empty Wanting something to show from all the work I did Nothing has changed... Just us with nothing but hate for the place that we call home for now Losing what I thought I knew was home Then Look around me there was no home from the beginning
Pieces Pieces by Pieces you slowly make a picture do you disgusted by what it looked like Forgotten and lost Like shards of glass scared around you broken dreams and hopes unwanted to fight all the time Letting it all go Throw it all as it all come down around you.
Dream Dreaming of something else as I sit here and looking out into the darkness I let this time slip away as if I couldn't do anything to hold it close braking down to what I think is real All that is around me seemed fake.
Unknown past The heat beating down on me As we work I hear the sound of the past Why must the voices come to me? The heat of battle comes ringing back in my ear Pain and the lost comes racing back to me Tears are hind by my sweat as I work.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 02, 2009 8:48 pm | |
| To Stormy~ Skin like an angle Voice of a goddess Graces as of a butterfly Wised like an owl
As I looked into your eyes My body takes me away As I long to have you by my side Hoping that this high will last forever!
To feel you’re silk like skin on my hand as I touch your cheek Sweet whispers run through my mind only if I could really speak them out loud!
Your voice seemed to chase this fear away that had a tight hold on me Oh my lady of fair what could you ever see in me?
I have no money to buy you pretty things No car to take you out in No place for you in my past only in my future do you have a place with me.
I may have no money maybe not even the best looking face around... I have my words to tell you how beautifully you are my love are unmated by any gold or silver that the others could bring you!
You may say this is a bold question You may just turn around and slap me I have to asked it or I will die if I never knew what you would say Would you kiss me and got out on a date with me?
~Raph~
Warrior Oath to You Story of a warrior has come to be born to night she will service her lady of fair with her life. She is now bound to her and her alone. She in barks into a new form of Son of Erebus First of her kind in hopes that others will follow her. Lady Rei she will do her will for she had freely chosen to be at her side. Waited too long to bow her head and after her sword to her. Gratefully Lady Rei had taken her on her oath. Now only death can break the bond.
Great One Hands of broken helped. Promised left undone lands and heart is one. Water and fire never touch Heart and soul is all but other Eagle and Wolf runs and plays Twins of two sides of a coin Random with Since Love and hate Passed and fall Forgive and Unknown Foreseen and undone. What can you hear the words that come to us Oh Great One full us up and let it all fall down to To those who do us harm! Take and given Love and Hate Heart and soul we are one for now and forever nothing can break the bond now! We are lovers for different life. Let it be done OH GREAT ONE!
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:50 pm | |
| Past Life Nightmare I can't shack it The feeling keeps coming back to me Can I really breath I see the light again And it still night fall Let the wait end and fade with this night Sweet voices Chanted to me I followed the voices You are who you are Dreamer Fighter Protector You are a part of me as I am to you The dream unfolds before me Helpless hands go unsteady As I dream of him yet again I dream of Sin... The darkness pulled me back into the burning hate and fear. you are who you are Dirtied Nothing Trash You are a part of me as I am to you Trapped under her shadows They seemed to cast out farther than I can run Miles away and I am still judged by her. Compared to the one that I hate the one that I love It can't be... Slowly breathing in and out will there ever be a brake for me? Never because I will die then be reborn into something sadder than what I am today. From a pretty princess to a poor little girl that barely can make it. From a medaions man daughter to this... my blood line slowly dies I am the last of my kind... So I thought Then I met him... The man that I had married or almost married in my past lives nothing came close killed by his own brother. Thank god I got him now.....
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Aug 05, 2009 7:51 pm | |
| Dark side of life Lost and can't be found I don't know who I am. I don't know what I should do I turn into a closed door. I kick and banged nothing but hate and coldness comes over Sick to my stomach Tears pours over me Red room.... Pain and lost Forgotten In the loops Rules to be broken Love to have a world out there from our own. Not in our mind but into the spirit! I can't keep listening to the little voices that mean nothing to me. It hurts but I can move on. Fading in the darkness that is around me. But yet I can see the light out there something is holding me back. What can I do what I am? Screaming and the hatred taking over us all It something I have to do I know that feelings will be hurt. So what... I have been hurting too long. WHY must I be this way? Don't let me go love I don't know who I am! I put a wall up to keep everything out... I didn't want it to keep you out... I don't want to hurt you but it seemed that I am hurting you anyways I can see it in your eyes. What can I say or do to make you see what I am going through Please don't turn away from me!
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:12 pm | |
| Untold Nightmare In the shadows I lay waiting for my vacuums slowly they walk down a path they know not of Death that lays ahead for us all. Some will go with great proud Some will go with nothing at all All I have to say is remember this face; It will be the last thing you see Before you draw your last breath! I sit and wait for the cold to come for me though it has came close many of times but never fully covers me as it has the others. So here I lay awake waiting for it to come for me Blood lust is what it is Come and have your full For I know my blood is tented By the past Of which has led me here Screaming of nightmares Unsure of the daylight Let us dance in the moonlight As it takes us by our souls tonight Let us know who awaits for us Death and disperse Life and Desire I throw my hands up in the air As I wait in the shadows For what most may not be able to see Demons of the shadow realms The weak will fall The strong will fade Battle undone Going on for many years Let it go they tell me I can't for is battle as took too much from me Dream of the end Yet fear the end... Irony just thinking about it. Wish for something that is not evil Yet look at the past Burned for what I am Hunted because I was feared Exited by the one I loved Killed by family Speared by none The path of a freak like me What am I? I don't know myself.
Unknown past The heat beating down on me As we work I hear the sound of the past Why must the voices come to me? The heat of battle comes ringing back in my ear Pain and the lost comes racing back to me Tears are hind by my sweat as I work.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:13 pm | |
| Confined what I am. Look at what I am… Can you see the true me as I lay here Waiting for you my love Do you know what I have done? Do you really care what you love? I am not human… Nor am I vampire Or werewolf I am a freak Can’t you see that there is no saving me? Just cut me and kill me Save yourself from this despair. That I am sure I will give you With every kiss is sealed with a lie… Why do I let you keep going with this lust? I am a fool for you. Your face, touch and soul Keeps me here Do you see why I can’t stay here anymore??? I wish I could fully tell you what I am feeling. My head is screaming as I cry.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Aug 05, 2009 8:29 pm | |
| Fools’ hope Dreamers’ lane Feeling so high A story waits to be told All high bets As the demons play their songs Hands reached out for help No one there because of this rage Brother, Sister Lover, Enemy Birth, Death Screaming voices Hate that rising Lost of self Rage blind you
Falling so fast as I think of what could had been Sitting here at 4 in the mornowing And all I see your face The last time I saw it Words that were said I never got to say I am sorry… It hurts that you told that you were leaving There was nothing I could say or do to change it It was because the way I acted one fateful night My true self got the best of me. And now your blood is on my hands.
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*~Dreamer~* Combining your affinities to save the day
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| Subject: Re: written words Thu Aug 06, 2009 10:04 am | |
| wah, that's a lot. I haven't had time to finish them...
Well, I'll just say what I like better.
Love, it's a wonderful poem ^^ -- Catches me.
Warriors oath to you, I see the images appearing, and the actions leading to another -- the story unfolding.
Pieces, it is really close to me. You explained the feelings to the dot!
Wonderful! Love them all!! Keep adding, though I'll need quite some time to read, your poems are long, and I'm a really slow reader. | |
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Fri Aug 07, 2009 3:58 pm | |
| Set of poems that all gose together but stand well by theirself.
Poet Words on paper Moves the Strong and weak alike I have on my side a voice of color My word are written on the sands of time Many will know me as a Spiritual soul The word of Poet will move everybody just by words I was chosen by Nyx to write down her words.
High Priestess Chosen friends are hard They must be true even when you have some kind of power Yet it is hard been me When everyone looking up at me for answers I feel that I must be sometimes wiser then my years. All I can say is I will do my best to be a good leader and friend I didn’t asked to be High Priestess but I was chosen to be I will do my best in doing Nyx’s will.
Air Always around Can be care free But yet pushy at times Is something to fear and love? Without me there is no life Air were part of everyone
Fire Pictured as rage and hate But is so much more Am graceful, loving and warm Dancer of flames Warm voices Without Fire there is no raging love
Water Life started with water Making up everybody Pure and claim Crystal clear as ones future Always flowing Water bringer of life and love
Earth Our very home Strong as a single mother Surpoting everything Can and will show rage as a mother Sadly she is batter with stupid things Earth our one true mother
Spirit Is everything You can’t touch it But you can feel it Essences of it presences It makes everything what it is Spirit the guider
Circle Poem We are crazy and leaders Brothers and sisters The circle is family Family is belonging to something more Eyes on us always But we are one … we are strong We are leaders We can do anything as long as we have each other We are the Circle
Circle’s Code We hold these cold As clear as each other A promise that can’t be broken easily Characters that we bear Understanding as Air Loving as Fire Claiming as Water Caring as Earth Bounding as Spirit We know there is more than being in the circle Then the power given to us We promise to up hold all That is asked of us to the best we can
Red Moon Oh, Bright Red Moon, In the sky above us We asked of favor from thee
To keep our faith high in all that we believe in Weather it be in you or just some greater out there that we believe in For a good harvested when the time comes Many things can be harvested from food, love, wisdom and friendship And may you be smiling down on us To show that we are truly loved by someone and this circle
Let us face anything bravely For you is the last full moon of the summer nights As we look around us Let us enjoy the change around us From the leaves colors to cold nights You started of school and learn from others
Let us have open minds to everything we shall learn this month and more The wisdom she shares to us tonight will be with us as we will grow to love Nyx and thee The thing is she lives in us all as our goddess Nyx dose. We thank you for what you share with us.
Thank you Red Moon Thank you Nyx!
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*~Dreamer~* Combining your affinities to save the day
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| Subject: Re: written words Sat Aug 08, 2009 12:29 pm | |
| Oh yeah, great that you've posted them up here! You don't know how much I love them!!
Still loving poet poem as always! <3333
And yeah, spirit rocks.
I love the circle oath as well, so true!!!
<3ing your poetry!! ^^ | |
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Aug 09, 2009 5:40 pm | |
| Images… Drip, Drip goes the sound of rain Cold breath upon my neck Vision blurring in and out… Under the chain of my enemy Kicked at Cursed out P!ss on What a life! Try your best to make me Bend and brake I know that there is no released for me The pounding in the back of my head Because of the images play like a slideshow Images of Pain, love, and lost
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*~Dreamer~* Combining your affinities to save the day
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| Subject: Re: written words Mon Aug 10, 2009 12:33 am | |
| I can totally see the images piecing themselves to form a story. Wonderful one water guard! | |
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
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Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Wed Oct 07, 2009 6:58 pm | |
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| Subject: Re: written words Mon Oct 12, 2009 5:25 am | |
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Sun Oct 18, 2009 12:16 pm | |
| Wild beast Shadow standing there just birght as the day as the night comes to a close bones shitfing a cold breezed comes over me as the sun rised up as i looked i see a monster in me as if i was a human looking at me for the frist time unknown that scears the souls of soo many. yet i don't see myself as a monster anymore just another beast of lust and wild calls now i sit and wait for the moon to rise again just so that i could be my whole self again just called me Wild Beast that runs and hunts and calls out for other of my kind saddly there is no other like me here or around here...
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
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Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Fri Nov 13, 2009 8:32 am | |
| forsaken
the forgoten, that wounder around this world wishing to be remember yet again set their fire once more to burn the heart of enemies and friends alike show that the forsaken ones will rise up once more light the sky every colors letting everything go fighting to be laugh in the rain dream of the future.
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Character sheet Name: Karena Drako Age: 19 Affinities : Writting and Death
| Subject: Re: written words Fri Nov 13, 2009 12:55 pm | |
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*~Dreamer~* Combining your affinities to save the day
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| Subject: Re: written words Mon Nov 16, 2009 4:57 am | |
| A nicely written poem, a few spelling errors and I don't get this line.
"fighting to be"
It is incomplete and doesn't make sense in the context.
I read "Light the sky with every color", don't know just feel that it sounds better that way.
I love that line most btw.
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Sharon_the_Warrior Getting new tattoos
Age : 37 Posts : 2385 Location : woundering around looking for home Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Ella Raven Moren Age: Unknow to herself Affinities : Earth,
| Subject: Re: written words Thu Nov 19, 2009 7:10 pm | |
| fighting to be... means to fight to live. i think it more poetiet that way. | |
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Age : 34 Posts : 16563 Location : why do you wanna know??? Join date : 2009-07-14
Character sheet Name: Karena Drako Age: 19 Affinities : Writting and Death
| Subject: Re: written words Thu Nov 19, 2009 10:43 pm | |
| i believe the way you wrote it is perfect. it makes sence and i can see what its about | |
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