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Amber Rae
Sending for Water from the West
  
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Thu Jul 07, 2011 10:59 am | |
| That poem is depressing but i think it express what most people think and feel. I LOVE IT :'( i think imma cry | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Thu Jul 07, 2011 11:03 am | |
| thank you for your kind review. I always appreciate when people bother to read and review. very much appreciated. Well, it was what I felt then. Btw, i forgot to add: look at the shape. it isn't really a poem based on shapes, but it shows that of a lone girl.  slight deliberation for the shape, not too much. | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Fri Jul 08, 2011 12:27 pm | |
| Pieces of My Mind
I
Giving makes one lovable,
Sharing returns showers of love,
Cause what goes around comes around.
II
Offering thoughts gets one one-liners,
Giving honest critics brings home silence,
Saught not seek of shallow simplistic souls.
~Ger. | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Jul 10, 2011 8:06 am | |
| The Proud Secretary
I
Whether 'Drama Queen',
or 'Scary Little Teacher',
They all do not matter,
for you stay the best mentor,
in the depths of my heart.
Reasons, I don't have many,
but love and passion,
I have boundless of them!
II
I once had the wildest dreams,
to publish a compilation of my writes.
Thought it was foolish of me,
yet now I see an abundance of hope.
Striving to give the best of the best
in every chance you lay before me,
hoping to never fail you even once,
yet I do know I often do.
'Overcomer' is not just a label,
it is who I am, and what I want to be.
For I DO strongly believe,
that under your wings,
my future will be bright.
III
There really isn't a need for me
to wish you a Happy Teachers' Day,
for I know you will always be,
because you survived 4MD!
And there may be many I adore,
but you're by far the best I've had,
and thus the reason for my choice --
To be the English Language Rep!
~Ger. | |
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vampirechild
Accidentally blowing your friends over with Air
 
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Jul 10, 2011 8:12 pm | |
| Your poems are very nice. | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Wed Jul 13, 2011 9:52 am | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Jul 17, 2011 6:59 am | |
| The Piano II
Wooden pieces,
black and white.
Each similar,
yet different.
When down together,
creates a mood.
You'll always know
what it tells off,
even without lines
to tel the tale.
~Ger. | |
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Erinacchi
Finally mastering Fire
 
Age : 29
Posts : 624
Location : A sunny field with FÃli
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Mon Aug 01, 2011 7:45 am | |
| Really pretty! (Sorry I haven't been commenting~) The Piano II is probably one of the best poems I've read. Very beautiful. | |
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*~Dreamer~*
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Tue Aug 02, 2011 7:02 am | |
| Thank you, i haven't been active on this site either. no one commented, so after awhile, i just gave up posting. afterall, no point posting to myself. i have a copy of the poem for myself, in my computer. no need to post it up somewhere where no one bothers to leave a comment. | |
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Katie-la
Discovering you have an affinity for Earth
 
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Wed Aug 03, 2011 4:37 pm | |
| Psh..Ger! You have us! (Me and Nat rofl) But that's kinda the other site. I haven't been updating on here either, but there are more people! I've been attempting too, bahaha. But it's so hard to remember.
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Thu Aug 04, 2011 10:25 am | |
| it's not that, but most just don't really care to leave comments... even though i tried my best... even left them long comments. apparently, it makes no difference whether i post an in-depth review or a one-liner. i get the same reply. and i STILL have to ask for reviews... and they give me one-liners. sick and tired of always trying to start the ball rolling... and this ball is like a metal ball on a floor with a magnet at the starting point. it always goes back to square one. | |
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Zmirazz
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Thu Aug 04, 2011 6:41 pm | |
| - *~Dreamer~* wrote:
Lonely
Call of the souls abandoned,
shrills of the spirits forsaken,
none heard by others on earth.
Scrapes of memories to pick,
empty pages of future to seek,
a present day barren living.
~Ger. i hadn't read that one before!! i really like it Ger!! you know you should consider making a book i'm not kidding!! | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Fri Aug 05, 2011 8:42 am | |
| thanks, but i'm nowhere near good. there're indeed a lot out there better than me. and it's pretty obvious on here. mine's pretty much just dead cause hardly anyone comes by, not even me i'd have to admit. it's difficult to keep a thread alive when there's no one to pick up the line on another end. | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Fri Aug 05, 2011 8:48 am | |
| The Right Foot
Wealth with modesty,
yearn by so many.
Riches with friendliness,
feared like the lioness.
Couples with friends,
picked and magnified.
Friends but far apart,
missed and left aside.
If center is where you are,
then middle'll be where you end.
Thus circle that rings around,
stays as contours of the body.
~Ger. | |
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Zmirazz
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Fri Aug 05, 2011 1:24 pm | |
| - *~Dreamer~* wrote:
- thanks, but i'm nowhere near good. there're indeed a lot out there better than me. and it's pretty obvious on here. mine's pretty much just dead cause hardly anyone comes by, not even me i'd have to admit. it's difficult to keep a thread alive when there's no one to pick up the line on another end.
i think that you are really good! and can't compare yourself to any one else because every person has its own style own feelings and language.and personally i think that those are the basics for a good write.you are good in your own way.its been a long time since i came here.i kind of forgot about it lool | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 8:39 am | |
| well, of course it is essential to feel it. but it isn't of much use of others don't feel it. and you never know if they do, until they tell you so. | |
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Zmirazz
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 8:44 am | |
| right.well at least i felt every word you said that is why i told you once that i'm a big fan!! | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 11:09 am | |
| haha. thanks. did bust my ego a little there ><
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 11:14 am | |
| Pendulumn
Left, right, left, right.
Here they come and there they go.
Soon they can hypnotize,
and bring forth slumber.
Yet, while I do oscillate about,
but I swing upon the spiteful
emotional continuum,
Left, right, left, right.
~Ger.
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Zmirazz
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 1:22 pm | |
| i honestly am confused.are you referring the pendulum to yourself or? | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sat Aug 06, 2011 11:10 pm | |
| edited it a little, hope it is clearer now. it's both. but more of me paralleling myself to a pendulum. | |
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Zmirazz
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Aug 07, 2011 9:34 am | |
| yeah it is clearer and i like the idea:D:D | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Aug 07, 2011 10:16 am | |
| thanks. I thought it was short so i lumped them together thinking it would make it neater.
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Amber Rae
Sending for Water from the West
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Aug 07, 2011 10:50 am | |
| Lol i lok it it is very you dreamer... | |
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| | Subject: Re: My Lousy Scribbles Sun Aug 07, 2011 10:55 am | |
| thanks. haven't seen you around for quite a bit (: nice to see you on again and cheer up alright? (referring to your 'mood' status) Tell me if anything, i can lend you and ear for anything (: | |
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